Here's my flyer; please read and let me know your thoughts

[Tenchi]

Here's the flyer I am going to put up at the New Mexico University campus. Let me know what you guys think. Do you think it will attract a crowd.

Social Nudity is Healthy, Wholesome, and Fun
Try Social Nudity
Visit INA?s website at http://www.clothesfree.com/

Are you tired of the body being thought of as nothing more than just a sex object? Are you tired of the shame and guilt that surrounds the human body through Puritan attitudes and the pornography industry? Would you love to see the body shown in a wholesome and healthy light? Then check out the International Naturist Association at http://www.clothesfree.com/ and get a taste of body respect.

INA teaches
1. That the human body is inherently good and decent.
2. That nudity doesn?t automatically equate lust, and that nudity isn?t about sex.
3. That co-ed nudity isn?t against the Bible or most religious principles.
4. Social nudity is for all people including Christians, other religious systems, and atheists.
5. EveryBODY is beautiful weather you are old, young, fat, skinny, missing a limb, or have a disability, etc, etc, we are all beautiful and special. You don?t have to be a model to participate in social nudity.
6. That nudity is both physically and mentally healthy.
7. Nudity can get people closer to nature.
8. That through social nudity we can develop healthy thoughts about our bodies that aren?t drenched in shame or sex.
9. And much, much, more.

Yep, it?s true, there are naturists out there. We are people that believe the body is inherently good and decent. We are also known as nudists. We enjoy the sunshine warming our entire body, the air on our skins, being close to nature, hiking up a mountain trail on a warm sunny summer day, and swimming without wet soggy swimsuits that bind and clamp. Would you like to experience nude recreation? If so then look up the internet page the Internation Naturist Association, and learn about the beauty and goodness of nude recreation. Once you try social nudity out in nature, while working out, or swimming, you may never want to go back to clothes again.

[Tenchi]

Here's the flyer I am going to put up at the New Mexico University campus. Let me know what you guys think. Do you think it will attract a crowd.

Social Nudity is Healthy, Wholesome, and Fun
Try Social Nudity
Visit INA?s website at http://www.clothesfree.com/

Are you tired of the body being thought of as nothing more than just a sex object? Are you tired of the shame and guilt that surrounds the human body through Puritan attitudes and the pornography industry? Would you love to see the body shown in a wholesome and healthy light? Then check out the International Naturist Association at http://www.clothesfree.com/ and get a taste of body respect.

INA teaches
1. That the human body is inherently good and decent.
2. That nudity doesn?t automatically equate lust, and that nudity isn?t about sex.
3. That co-ed nudity isn?t against the Bible or most religious principles.
4. Social nudity is for all people including Christians, other religious systems, and atheists.
5. EveryBODY is beautiful weather you are old, young, fat, skinny, missing a limb, or have a disability, etc, etc, we are all beautiful and special. You don?t have to be a model to participate in social nudity.
6. That nudity is both physically and mentally healthy.
7. Nudity can get people closer to nature.
8. That through social nudity we can develop healthy thoughts about our bodies that aren?t drenched in shame or sex.
9. And much, much, more.

Yep, it?s true, there are naturists out there. We are people that believe the body is inherently good and decent. We are also known as nudists. We enjoy the sunshine warming our entire body, the air on our skins, being close to nature, hiking up a mountain trail on a warm sunny summer day, and swimming without wet soggy swimsuits that bind and clamp. Would you like to experience nude recreation? If so then look up the internet page the Internation Naturist Association, and learn about the beauty and goodness of nude recreation. Once you try social nudity out in nature, while working out, or swimming, you may never want to go back to clothes again.

[R.M. Greenman]

I like it! You might start your own nudist group down there. [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_wink.gif[/img]

[hw]

Very good Tenchi.... Corky, Bart this guy would be a great P.R. man for you! [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_biggrin.gif[/img] [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_biggrin.gif[/img]

[Outlaw]

Hi Tenchi-

This is Big Mac her, a first timer on the BB.

I really like your flyer and hope it does what you want it to do. Since I am an editor of sorts I see a lot of misspelled words in the BBs. Even yours.(A lot of this is probably hasty typing.) Check out the word weather in your flyer. You want to use the word whether instead. Hang in there and be strong.

Big Mac

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The measure of a mind's evolution is its acceptance of the unacceptable. Rana--2150AD

[Rik]

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Originally posted by Tenchi:
[qb] Are you tired of the body being thought of as nothing more than just a sex object? Are you tired of the shame and guilt that surrounds the human body through Puritan attitudes and the pornography industry? [/qb]

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The reality is that most people will answer "No" to these two questions (because they won't understand what you're getting at)and will then have no reason to read the rest of this very long flyer.

My advice is:
- focus on "EveryBODY is beautiful" - it's a good line. Use it as the header.
- remove the idea of what INA "teaches". Who wants to be taught anything? Talk about "discovery" instead, perhaps what you can discover about yourself if you dip your toe into social nudity.
- keep it very very short - if it's a flyer it will only make impact if you can read it quickly.
- include a suitable graphic or two.
- put your name and a contact number on it e.g. "Wanna know more? Call Tenchi on nnn-nnn." No-one will call but it will give it more credibility.

Rik

[Croydon]

You have the idea but need to cut the flier short. WAY too long. A flier is suppose to give readers, the who, what, and when. No one is going to stand and read the whole thing. After a few sentences, readers will be tuned out. One thing I have learned from my marketing major is that people have short attention span, especially when you are trying to advertise something to them. The message has to be short and to the point.

What is your goal here? Are you promoting INA or are you trying to start a nudist group on campus?
If you are promoting INA, all you have to mention in the flier is what INA is (few short sentences) and where they can find new information. You have gone overboard by explaining INA and it's philosophy, the readers will know that once they visit the webpage. After all, that is the point of it.

I suggest getting rid of the INA Teaches part. The first three lines are great start so I would keep that. I would get rid of the paragraph starting with "Are you Tired". It's very cliche and sketchy. It seems as if people who become nudists do so because they are tired of the body shame guilt, porno, or because they are being seen as sex object. That is very sketchy paragraph. Instead of saying that, why not mention the fun things u can do in nude. Again, keep it short.

You have the right idea Tenchi, but you are saying too much in a flier. A flier is suppose to be SHORT, SIMPLE, and straight to the point

[greensunshine]

Sometimes having a word misspelled is a great way to get attention...especially in a world where everyone thinks we should always be PErfect [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_redface.gif[/img]

Sorry I guess I don't count as one of those who wood fit in then...even with all the formal education I have from going to school for what seemed like forever while working on several college degrees [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_razz.gif[/img]

And yes, I also notice especially when my fingers are in disagreement as to where the keys should be on hte keyboard with my mind [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_rolleyes.gif[/img]

Now if they woulde only design a keybord ot read our minds when we do misspell a word or better yet add the Spell Checker/Grammar option to this BB when we elect to add a reply ot someones thread [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_wink.gif[/img]

Greensunshine in the Pacific NW [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_smile.gif[/img]

PS

If anyone was wondering why some of the words in my reply are misspelled, it is to make a piont regarding how critical we often are of others [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_mad.gif[/img]

[greensunshine]

Tenchi,

I like your message in your flyer...it pretty much says it all without saying to much [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_wink.gif[/img]

Greensunshine in the Pacific NW [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_smile.gif[/img]

[Bartamus]

Tenchi: First off..on behalf of INA..Thanks for the flyer.
Secondly, Rik and Croydon make a very good point about brevity. They are also right about using a one line or two line description of what the International Naturist Society is all about.
If you want our official mission statement..go to our main webpage.
I'll private message you about some minor details.
Thanks again for getting the word out about us
and thanks for your dedication in getting younger people involved with naturism

[Rik]

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Originally posted by Bartamus:
[qb] They are also right about using a one line or two line description of what the International Naturist Society is all about. [/qb]

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International Naturist Society? Have you changed the name?

Rik

[Tenchi]

I thank you all for the advive and criticism that you gave me. [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_smile.gif[/img] However are you sure I should shorten it? After all I have seen long flyers on campuses and I read them.

[Snoboy]

Tenchi, great job. I would encourage you to make your statement brief and be sure you use spell check. It would not hurt to have someone edit it for you before it goes to print. I am a junior at my college and very busy. Make your statement brief and use a catchy phrase for your title and enlarge it so if it is posted on billboards, etc., around campus you will get the students attention and then they may stop and read it. As a new student on campus you will want to make a good impression so be sure you use good grammer other wise you will lose your audience really fast. Good luck with the great endeavor to promote our lifestyle. [img]/infopop/emoticons/icon_wink.gif[/img]

[Outlaw]

To Greensunshine-

I don?t understand why people think you are being critical if you are making suggestions to increase the professional appearance of an advertisement. I certainly wouldn?t pay much attention to a business ad or letter if it contained poor spelling or bad grammar.

I remember seeing a comment in print about an airline company. It said something to the effect that ?if you find your seat area sloppy when you get on a plane, what do you expect about their engine maintenance??

I do not like to judge others (so much so, I do not like to serve on juries). My statement was about one word misspelled; nothing else.

Take nothing personally.

Big Mac

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P.S. Please read my tag line.

[Tenchi]

Okay if people have short attention spans, what would you guys suggest I do to keep it short and straight to the point. What would you guys write on a flyer. I am eager to hear more suggestions.